canislupis

You can get a learner's permit here at sixteen, I think. ;) It varies depending on where you live. Hmm, I suppose I echo what others have said about plot, ...

This reminded me a bit of Midsummer night's dream, by Shakespeare... :) One comment I had was that you are doing a lot of "he walked over and did this, ...

Wow! Really cute. Are these your dogs? They all came out pretty well. This made me want to post the pics I've taken of my dog... I might in fact. ...

Ah... I see. Well, the spacing is much better now. for some reason when copying and pasting from microsoft word or any other type program, YWS takes out a few ...

Wow! Do you know that "you are my sunshine" was my absolute favorite song when I was little? This really disturebed me. :) Besides all the stuff that azila pointed ...

Not sure where I'm going with this... Just sortof flowed out of the key-board. There are probably loads of tense issues, I wouldn't know. ^____^ Thank you in advance for ...

GRACE!!!!!!!! hiya.. :lol: Anyway, this is nice! Am i wrong in thinking I recognize some of the scenes in your story? So...... You are using some nice descriptive language, and ...

I think the reason you haven't gotten any reviews yet is becuase the paragraphs aren't spanced out properly. This is your first post, so for the next time, remember to ...

canis >> Thanks! I'l fix those things. And Maude is a mutt: german shepard/border-collie/black lab mix. Awwww. :) She sounds really cute. I have a mutt too!

yeah..... It was also a bit hard to read. If this was the literary forum, I'd poiont out that every single one of your paragraphs start with 'I'.... anyway, this ...

Thanks! I will edit when I have time....

Name: Selena Race: Clairvoyant Appearance: Ice blue eyes, piercing gaze. Light-brown hair. Average hight Personality: Intelligent but quiet. Observant. makes few friends but sticks by them. And a seco

Nashoba Mystics Zern crashed into Ahanu's side, knocking him off balance. Nashoba bit down on his scruff, not drawing blood but pinning him untill the others arrived.

Nice! Like has already been said, this does flow very nicely. I only found two typos: There are no clouds, and the stars are lost in a sweet fog. My ...

Hope no one is afraid of mice. :) I have edited a bit thanks to comments, (thanks!) but haven't done any major plot-wise kinda stuff. I'll get to it when ...