canislupis

Hi there! First of all, thanks for entering the contest! Personally, I really liked this piece and it was really, really hard to pick. Anyway, I'll start with the good ...

Hi there! Lupis, here to review today. :D So, you've got some good ideas here--plenty of conflict (I like how you didn't drag the intro on forever) and I like ...

Hi! So, this was pretty bad. But it could be worse. For example, the conversation with the dragon is funny, but it drags on a bit. And I think you ...

Labelle: Thanks so much! I thought about adding a break between the second-to-last and final woman, but I didn't really want to kill her for whatever reason. I also think ...

Hi there! This was proofread well, which was nice (for a change) and I enjoyed reading it. I do have a couple quick things to add though: 1. Animal Emotions ...

Hi everyone! Thanks for your comments. Born/Ish/Joyce: I'm going to work on the confusion and connect the characters a little more (or at least try to) and post an edited ...

When/if you have time, mind taking a look at this? I guess I'd call is general fiction, and it's very short. The plot needs some ironing, though. :D Don't worry ...

Hey Tanya! If you're not too busy, would you mind taking a look at this for me? It's flash fiction, and I need to make it less confusing (only about ...

She lays him down, trying not to see the bones stretching the skin, the collapsed hole between hips and ribs, the sunken eye sockets, legs no more than sticks, and ...

Am I the only one who sees a frog sitting in a block of ice for all of them? I'm also getting a "domain unrecognized" error message. :(

The way I figure out sources of conflict is like so: Take any character. What do they want, more than anything else? What prevents them from getting it? I love ...

Here´s another idea: Don´t worry about the length till after you´re done editing it. Definitely not before you finish a first draft. :D

I do find that reading it aloud helps--it's easier on short stories and poetry (because really, who want to sit around for ten hours reading a novel?) but with sections ...

Have you ever been camping? Sometimes the flames will catch the pitch suddenly, and whooom! Haha. I believe it was also used to coat the heads of torches. Then again, ...

It's magic and you don't need to do a single thing Ooooh... Magic. And yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Just yesterday I lost a 1,000 word review. Nothing is more depressing. ...