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Hey lava! I really like these. My favorite was the one looking up the trunk of the palm tree. The other ones I'm not so sure about--the orange one (I ...

I'm not sure how to react to this. It's like a story in a single paragraph! ;) Where is the conflict? Story= character with a goal+obstacles/challenges that try to keep ...

What I liked: The voice is getting stronger, and I laughed at the same points Skins did. :) It sounds very real! Also, I like that her character is a ...

Done! Any other takers?

Is it the hobo or the dog who's named Jeff? It all depends. XD Just kidding, I'd rather dance around in the mankini. :lol: Would you rather.... Be the guy ...

Wow, I really liked this. The way they interacted with eachother was really realistic, and it was very well written. I'm not really sure where it is you're going with ...

Hi there! It looks like the nitpicks have been taken care of, so I'll just find something else to talk about. :) I really liked this--the voice is very unique ...

I can't believe the last post was almost a year ago! I need more stuff to read, people! * resurrects thread *

“I’ve had enough of this,” he announced as he heaved himself up. “Having to use the back door all the time.” He stomped over to the corner where his diminishing ...

Hi there! I really enjoyed reading this story, but before I get to overall comments, I think I'll just jump right in: I closed my eyes. This was it. I ...

Why is this so short? This could very easily be combined with the next segment. It's not even really a prologue, since that is, by definition, a section that does ...

Ok--I'll be honest. I only got about 1/3 of the way through this. Why? Because a) it isn't spaced out which makes it very hard to read, b) this was ...

Ok, here to review as requested! Now, a lot of what I was going to say has already been said. ;) So, here is what I have left: What I ...

I agree with dreamy, to an extent, but I also have to say how much I liked the imagery. From the moment I read your title I really wanted to ...

This is so cool! I agree with Embee, though--fade the crystal. I also didn't really like the way the pointer and middle fingers faded out against the background. I know ...