canislupis

Hi! LOVE this! Shosanna's personality was perfect and I got a very real sensation of her terror. The pacing was nearly perfect as well. A knock sounded from the front ...

Ah, ok. I get the hair imagery more now. :) But it still should be "it's" with an apostrophe, I think. I really did like the idea of this, though. ...

Hi again! So, I like the way this is going so far. I love the way the accents sound authentic, and I still get that western feel. :) I also ...

I'm not going to pretend I know how to critique poetry, but I did like this. Quick note, though: "Its" is possesive. I think you meant "It's we" as in ...

Well-dressed figures swirled in the ballroom, for the moment careless to the events occurring in the world outside. Merry music resonated from musicians situated throughout the hall, and it combined ...

Hi there! Here to review (obviously). Sorry this took so long. So, I like this. It is very short, but I have an intense fear of long prologues. Why? They ...

Skins, yours is done. Hope it helped a bit. :) Attolia, yours should be done soon. -Lupis

Hi! Here to review as requested, though I seemed to have been just a bit too slow. :) Private Peaceful was assigned reading last year for me, and it's really ...

Banned for having a signature I don't understand....

Hi there! Here to review. :) Jeremy slouched against the wall, trying to look casual, though felt slightly awkward and out of place. His eyes slowly scanned the small group ...

I agree with Rosey. :) Generally speaking, a prologue is something that takes place at a different point on the story's timeline or in a different place than the actual ...

Wow, I really like this! I've found myself warming up to the story a lot, and this is my favorite bit so far. The confusion has mostly worn off as ...

Finished! Sorry I couldn't be more helpful--fanfiction isn't really my thing. ;) Next?

I demand to know who sent me presents! And thank you. :D

Ahhh..... Much better! This is soooooo much easier to read now. :) Anyway, on to the actual critique: What I liked: Again, the accents were great! I can't say I've ...