canislupis

If there were two "l"s, I'd say meh-llen, but now I'm seeing my-len.

Well, where is this set? If it's a rural area, it could be a family-owned kinda place named after someone. (I'm pretty sure they still buy gas from an actual ...

Thanks, Suzanne! I'm not at all offended--and I agree completely. I think I'll edit it as soon as I get the chance--especially about the cliffhangers. I don't think my meaning ...

Hello there! Lupis, here to review today. Now... nitpicks first? I only have a few more general ones. 1. Weird spacing. In the first paragraph, there are lots of places ...

5 Steps to Create Tension and Suspense in Fiction Narratives Suspense is one of the most powerful driving forces in fiction, and when used correctly, will keep readers turning pages ...

Hi again! Here is your review, as requested. So, I like that you’ve taken the comments you’v gotten into account, and I definitely think this is better than the first ...

Hi! Here is your review, as requested. It may run a little long, so bear with me. ;) I like this story a lot—it reminds me of the warriors series, ...

Gary gets interrupted by Isabella’s quick decision. You switched tenses here. “Babe, don’t hold your breath. Breath in and out.” Gary demonstrates the way the doctor had showed them how ...

If you're interested, there's also the book "The writer's guide to everyday life in the middle ages." I got it at the library and found it extremely helpful when thinking ...

Hi! Here is your requested review. Hope I can be of assistance--I'm really liking what I've read so far. Ok, on to the review! A few line-by line comments, and ...

Thanks guys! Jagged--Notice how I covered up the paws? Obviously I am way too lazy/intimidated by her feet to draw them all the way. :lol: I will definitely try adding ...

Thank you so much for your comments--the mirror tip is an excellent one. I was using plain drawing paper. Not sure what type now. :) About the white: the strip ...

Hello everyone. This is a drawing I did a few weeks ago that I thought I'd upload for critiques. I apologize in advance for my shoddy scanning job. I would ...

NOT ACCEPTING/ RETIRED Name: Canislupis, Lupis, whatever. A lot of people call me Canis. Age: 15 What you write: Fiction of all kinds, but mostly magical realism/fantasy or historical fiction. ...

Looks neat! My only suggestion would be to add more detail around the head and belt so we can see what it is, but since this is for a story, ...