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He hestitated by the door and slowly tapped the neutral walls. How are walls neutral? He hestitated by the door and slowly tapped the neutral walls. He watched the elderly ...

Hello everyone, I am considering putting a character with epilepsy into one of my stories. As it would be a fairly major character, and thus will change the story quite ...

I don't know anything about Naruto, but from what I can see this looks like a neat drawing. :D I especially like the hair. My only complaint at this point ...

Live in the jungle... not because I have an adversion to bigfoot, but because that actually sounds appealing to me, lol. Would you rather.... Sleep for a whole year Or ...

If you were to look into a dying man's eyes, would you see a truth? Would you ask yourself, "Why am I here? What's the significance?" Today I'm looking into ...

I would be happy to read through it and give a general opinion--don't really have time for a full critique, but I could definitely give some general comments if you'd ...

Here is a good link on negative affects of divorce. Here is another one. Hope I helped! Lupis

I'm not sure about how to help you with this, but I thought I'd mention that "abdomen" needs to be changed as that means stomach in English, lol. (unless that's ...

Hi! And welcome. I think you'll love the forum--it's full of nice, helplful people. :D I've only tried archery once or twice and failed epically each time. It's fun to ...

spend 45 years in a high school seems Write this out. And so here I am Awkward sentence beginning, especially for the first line of a chapter. This is a ...

Three. Or whatever I can do in the half-hour I have on the computer.

Erm, bread. Couldn't be too bad. Would you rather never be able to stop talking for the rest of your llife, OR never be able to stop dancing?

Well, I'm late. But I'm joining! Going for 50,000 yet again this year. It'll be my.... *counts* fifth Wrimo novel, though only my second Julno. Current Wordcount: A big fat ...

To add to what Surreal said--while it's not ilegal to use real people in your work, it probably isn't a good idea. Why? Because it's really annoying to read most ...

Hi there Attolia! So, I think this is a very strong chapter—the plot is moving along nicely and your characters are very well developed. I’m thinking most of my comments ...