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Hello! I need some help with this poem: Caveat: I've always written prose and have literally no idea what I'm doing with poetry. Anything you notice would be helpful, and ...

Hello again! I noticed that you made some edits and couldn't resist commenting. So, first off, I think this version is better! You're definitly getting closer to organizing your thoughts ...

Hi there! What I think this piece might benefit most from is a bit more structure. Right now I would write down an outline, just to give yourself a frame ...

I don't think a specific amino acid will be your problem--of all the carnivores, cats need to eat proportionally much more protein and fat than other animals, and very little ...

*has a second question* How can I explain that my character was adopted without telling it outright? It depends on why it's important to the story, really. I have a ...

Hi! So, this is in the short story section, but it seems more like the opening to something bigger. I'm not quite sure how to criqitue this. I liked your ...

Hi! Like Rosey said, permanent discoloration from a dye would be pretty unlikely. You said fur, so I'm assuming some kind of animal. She could have a hereditary disease that ...

Hi there! I haven't been active in a really long time, and I just saw your message. So, while I don't know whether you even remember asking for a review, ...

Hello again! This may be a little short; hope that's ok. Now, I was pleasantly surprised reading this; with the first chapter, I was expecting something futuristic/almost fantasy. Then with ...

Hi ultraviolet! I looove reviewing things first. It makes me feel fast... and more important. Anyway, I still like your story. I think I'll go over what you wanted to ...

For some reason I was expecting a crayon drawing or something.... I love these, though! The first one is by far the best, but I love the mood that permeates ...

Hi! Sorry this took so long. Anyway, I decided to skip to the next part since I thought it would be more helpful to you. I'm also going to skip ...

Oh, ok then. For the 1800s, Shakespeare would be too old. :D Generally, it was probably pretty similar--perhaps a bit more formal, and definitely there are modern words that hadn't ...

What time period are you talking about? You could always read Shakespeare. ;) Also, you might want to avoid too many old words. Whenever I try to write with them ...

Is jungle/rainforest missing, or did I just not see it? Anyway, this seems helpful and inspiring. Thanks. :D