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Re: Leather and Lace - Chapter Two
Thanks so much again, guys! Your critiques are really helping a lot. I should be posting the next chapter very soon.
Jun 29, 2009 -
Re: Leather and Lace - Chapter Two
Hello again! This chapter is in need of some serious tearing-apart because some parts are very awkward. Here it is. *** Chapter Two Later in the day, when Sky is ...
Jun 24, 2009 -
Re: Leather and Lace - Chapter One
Thanks bunches for your critiquing, guys! It's really helping. Also, about the "said" thing: I've heard both sides, that "said" is better than other words and that other words are ...
Jun 24, 2009 -
Re: Leather and Lace - Chapter One
Hello there! I haven't posted something in a while. Anyway, this is my most recent project and I'm looking for some good constructive criticism. This actually isn't the full first ...
Jun 21, 2009 -
Re: I need... advice.
Write it, write it, write it! This sounds uber-interesting and I would so read it! Let me know if you post it, because I am so anxious to read it, ...
Mar 5, 2009 -
Re: Lady in Waiting - Chapter One
In case you weren't here for the last part, this is my failed attempt at NaNo this year, and I just kind of wanted to get some feedback, because even ...
Dec 16, 2008 -
Re: Lady In Waiting - Prologue
So this was my attempt at NaNo this year. I totally failed, but decided to put up what I do have to see if it's worth fixing up and finishing. ...
Dec 16, 2008 -
Re: Untouched ch 13
Hello! Finally got a chance to sit down and critique, so here goes... First, I just have a couple of nitpicks: His mind works so much differently than anyone else ...
Oct 1, 2008 -
Re: Leather and Lace - Chapter One Part 1
So maybe it doesn't seem like fantasy right now, but trust me, it will be. Although, the completion of this story is not guaranteed, so proceed with caution. Please critique ...
Sep 21, 2008 -
Re: Untouched ch 12
Well I've been reading this story since the first chapter, but I don't think I've reviewed it at all, and since I love it so much, I decided to go ...
Sep 21, 2008 -
Re: The Perfect 23
I think what you can do instead of doing 23 biographies is to pick just a few main characters that are most involved in the story, and write their biographies. ...
Aug 17, 2008 -
Re: Revising Hope, Chapter 2!
So I'm quite liking this story. I like the idea of it, though it is a bit cliche. You can stray it away from cliche, though, by putting obstacles in. ...
Aug 17, 2008 -
Re: Tales from the Weston Ranch
So this is just a little something I started a couple days ago. Basically, it's going to be a collection of short stories that kind of string together to make ...
Aug 16, 2008 -
Re: The Perfect 23
I am really, really liking this idea. The only thing I would be careful with is that for the time in which you are studying the characters because if you ...
Aug 16, 2008 -
Re: Unforgiven
Well, Periwinkle got most of it. There are a few things: His diamond white eyes met her gentle brown eyes (maybe use a different description here besides 'gentle brown,' because ...
Jul 26, 2008
