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very realistic poem and yes, i love the feel of how scary death was in this poem :) I am speechless XD

--> ooh, I get it. The message says that you and the ghost were one. I guess you need to widen or expand the idea. You can also add some ...

CHAPTER TWO Two hearts meet again "Hallo, Mama." Marky grinned as he went inside his mother's office. Two colors dominated the interior of her office: brown and black. "Take a ...

--> aaww! I think this is what love can really do, eh?? I'm soo in love with this :) good good poem! --->> yipes! *My impression. Very good. I really ...

---> For me, this one was well written! :) ---> The message was clear in this poetry, about losing a friend, a friend's betrayal. Keep up the good job and ...

I've always loved Zelda video games *tee-hee* and so is this one! :]

--> I get the concept of the story :) and like it although, I think I missed something and now I wonder what's Mr. Silence, all about? I mean who ...

To SmyLing !! ---> thanks for the feedback, I was really eager to add the other chapters but I sadly need another 100 points to do that :] And you ...

Hello, Summerlove! Thanks a lot! I'll keep writing! :)

CHAPTER ONE Arrival Marky Federal looked out through the window of that private airplane. He would be in the sandy beaches of Bella Amor resort in any minute. He wasn't ...