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Thinking about writing more to this but have not started because I have a lot on my plate right now in terms of writing. I have written other screenplays if ...

This is a school assignment for my freshman creative writing class. It is only a scene from a screenplay. Certainly not the whole thing. Tell me what you think and ...

Good, i wish i could give some specific details of what to do better but i do not have the time. possibly i will be back to do so. I ...

Did YWS get rid of the chat? I can't find it. Maybe I'm just dumb. haha

Love is horrible,powerful and unstoppable. It rips at your insides, it makes you bleed without touching you. Makes you cry without you wanting to, It makes you love without you ...

Good, the first stanza I think it should be known not know. Well written but you could use some similies or metaphors to better capture the moments you "share" with ...

Okay so I changed the whole poem basically... It is a lot different although not perfect seeing as how I have once again only written this in a mere ten ...

Ok... wrote this in 10 minutes.. haven't had a chance to edit yet.. Tell me what you think? I have a tough skin... not gunna be offended by anything you ...

What do you think? I came up with it in about ten minutes during class. Long Fuzzy Socks -------> I would omit this O, long fuzzy socks, what would life ...

To me, it seems like this poem could be a lot more descriptive. Right now, it seems fairly vague and plain. Your word choice is average and you are telling ...

To me, it seems like this poem could be a lot more descriptive. Right now, it seems fairly vague and plain. Your word choice is average and you are telling ...

Good, although you start out with lines that are kind of choppy and short then progress to longer lines that are almost full sentences. I don't know if you meant ...

Can you hear him? Can you hear the sound of the world? The trembling melodies Of ingenious methods Of combinations and flirtations The prickly strings that Cause the ringing of ...

I think you could use more language to describe really how you feel. Right now, this is just telling us, smacking us over the head with your feelings. Last stanza ...

So I clicked on this story in hopes of giving a opionated reveiw and realized I don't have much to say! Although there is some confusion in the middle of ...