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Thanks guys, that means a lot. I'm glad i got her accent right! :D I havn't started the next chapter yet, but i'll try to get it done as soon ...

I loved the rhyming in this poem; I thought it flowed very well. Although I understand what you were trying to get across, I think the poem maybe could’ve done ...

Wow. I'm not quite sure what to say. I'd be a hypocrite to say that this was sick, because a lot of the stuff i write myself contains graphic violence. ...

I lay awake in bed one hot summer night, when all of a sudden I jumped with a fright. My eyes they did dart from wall to wall, but nothing ...

I enjoyed this poem, although the punctuation and grammar needs some work. A journey that was new to me, Never saw anyone walk this path before I knew nothing except ...

Wow, powerful stuff! Just a couple of little pieces of nit-picking. Firstly I think you need to look at adding in a few comma’s after some of your lines, e.g. ...

I usually try to get to church on Sundays, let the big guy know I’m still on his side. But today I just couldn’t bring myself to leave the bed. ...

Hi Sapphirejay, thanks for the review. I tend not to reply to reviews but i just wanted to clear up a few things. A lot of the changes you've suggested, ...

hmmm, not sure about this. I'm a big Twilight fan but i still enjoy spoofs. I wasn't sure what you were going for with this one. The whole abusive father ...

Lol! I'm big Twilight fan but i loved this all the same. I'd like to have seen Bella a bit more feisty in the earlier books (perhaps not this feisty ...

Thanks for all the great reviews guys. I honestly i'd get better one's for country girl! Again, anything you think will make it better, let me know. Perhaps i'll even ...

Thanks for the comments guys, i'll definately take them on board. I'll admit it was just an idea that came to me and was thus fairly rushed, so any ideas ...

It's very short and very bleak, but let me know what you think. Last year I decided to kill myself. It was early autumn and I was happy. Walking to ...

a subject i'm all to familiar with! Well written on the whole, although in the line: As each day passes we grow more insecure, No longer the child we were ...

a subject i'm all to familiar with! weel written on the whole, although in the line: As each day passes we grow more insecure, No longer the child we were ...