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I like the beginning. It pulls the reader in. I found this easy to like and have no nit picks as far as I know. So well done and keep ...

I have sent this short story to Bliss magazine, hoping they'll print it off. If you like, then I'll be a happy Easter Bunny. ~~~~~ “What is going on Mum?” ...

This is a really good, powerful peice. I got loads of detail and feeling from it, and I did really enjoy it. This is a good, well thought about peice ...

This is pretty cool, the only problem is, the word schmetterling doesn't need a capital letter. Also, I don't think you need to use those crazy words because people will ...

1st Of September Julie is now officially Dad and Susan’s kid. This means she has to hold the twins when she asks and I can’t do nothing about it. Good ...

Thank you Titan4ever, I appreciate your love of my writing, it encourages me to write more! And, make sure you get the word around about this novel, I would like ...

This is really good, maybe you could split it into stanzas so it'll look more of a poem. I liked all the emotion you included and you wrote it perfectly. ...

These are awesome! You obviously have a talent for drawing. I love the bleeding rainbow one. It reminds me of the funny times me and my emo friend used to ...

I do like it, you have a very good talent for using... photoshop. Well done, though. At first I thought you drawn it by hand, but this is just as ...

This isn't my thing. You seem to not be very good at punctuation or anything. This doesn't work for me. Sorry. :evil:

There's tons of errors here. Please change them like this: (Red is for things that need to be changed). “ H urry she’s coming” Taylor said franticly. “ H oney ...

1st Of August Mrs Holman-Reynolds. I like it. It has a clever ring to it, don’t you think? The reason why I’m going on about this is because we’ve set ...

I like a book if it's colourful and has an interesting cover and an interesting blurb. At the moment, I am addicted to a series of books with awesome covers ...

Long blonde hair, deep blue eyes, gorgeous eyelashes. Everything a girl could ever want. And I have it. I have it all: the money, the fame, the popularity. It’s fab ...

Pretty good. I can't write much because I'm in a hurry but I'll try and write as much as I can. This is pretty good considering it's something you wrote ...