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Far too much, LOL. I'm a full-time extramural university student, which basically means that I get to work where and when I want, but it takes three times as long. ...

Well, I dont know. I guess most of it has been said already. In one sense, I liked this - the tone is nice and whimsical, and suits my mood. ...

My reaction: Wahuh? There's something majorly missing here, and guess what it is? Coherency. I'm really not getting the point of this poem! I stop and smile, And think a ...

THis was very good. A nice little piece that flowed well (like Ari said) and didnt overwhelm the story with historical detail. Well done! I'm going to be picky and ...

I liked this. They rhythm was unusual but smooth and fast moving, and each line seemed well-balanced. The imagery was awesome (in a revolting kind of way, LOL) and maintained ...

And I'm left with absolutely nothing left to say, LOL, except that it was very well done- I think my favourite of your poems so far. I love the deceptively ...

I do want to point out to you that if that is your real name then it's inadvisable to post it online like that. Otherwise, I'm afraid there really isnt ...

I'm thinking from this that you are feeling a bit harrassed, yes? So I will try to be gentle :) Aside from the general inadvisability of referring to a poem ...

Whoa lillizard -- are you channelling Incan or something? You're being a bit harsh there mate. Maybe tone it down just a little, OK? Hello xlilxzox, welcome to YWS! It's ...

Good point Nate! I hope I havent been mean to anyone **looks worried** I do tend to expect a lot from poets, even young ones...but you'd tell me if I ...

Welcome to YWS! Shall I be blunt? There are three major things wrong with this poem: 1. There is no point. I know poetry is an expression of self, but ...

I generally tend to make up exclamations rather than words, LOL. Awwww. Now I cant remember any. >.< Oh! I made up "Gurn" --- it's kind of, like, a word ...

"Amara, I'm sorry." -- Alexande "Don't let them win." -- Amara What would it take for you to willingly and knowingly murder someone?

I dont agree lillizard- for someone who doesnt usually write poetry this is pretty good. I think the preoccupation with rhyming is the problem really; your rhythm is quite strong ...

NaNoWriMo. She had joined as soon as it started, of course, but with one thing and another (school, college, her boyfriend, her job) she’d never had the time to actually ...