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Wow. I dont have time to give a full crit right now, but I just wanted to say this gave me the shivers. Powerful stuff :) I loved it.

**shrugs** Well I guess that one went whooshing straight over my head, LOL, since I have no idea who Prince is. Sorry!

To be honest? I got nothing from this. I *know* about the Ides of March, I know it was Brutus, I know Caesar died. Whatever. Why should I care? No, ...

I dont know anything about name changing either, so sorry -- cant really help you there. But I will crit just the same LOL. Overall, I quite liked this. It ...

...beautiful. I particularly liked the line "the whole-cloth/that is Monday" and the ending was perfect. I also think the structure was well done; it put me off a bit in ...

**points** What Myth said :D

Thanks guys, I appreciate the encouragement :)

Thanks Harpz :)

Welcome to the Young Writer's Sanitarium, affectionally known as the Funny Farm, where all good writers end up, eventually. Or perhaps where all good writers come from? Anyway, we're all ...

I guess that's encouraging, LOL. Will look forward to your crit, xanthan :).

I disagree with Chandni -- I think the "all" works well in those three lines. In fact, I'm more or less thoroughly impressed with this precisely the way it is, ...

Hey Harpz! Thanks again for the loan of your awesome title, LOL :) Here is the crit I promised! Intellectuals Breaking new grounds Charting new territories Sailing open waters Testing ...

(many thanks to Harpz for the use of her awesome title!) inspiration marinates this land in a thin glaze of honey wine and the nectar of old gods. across the ...

7/10 -- funny, but you need punctuation **stabs** LOL

First of all, like I said -- I really like this. It does have a very Russian flavour, actually (not that I would know), and I liked Lev as a ...