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Hi xanthan :) I quite enjoyed this...just a few things: Allow yourself perchance to dream for seam upon seam of this world is unyielding to all of our happenstance themes. ...

**blinks** When you said long, you werent kidding, LOL. Overall points, to begin with: 1. I think it would flow better if you didnt use capitals at the beginning of ...

Oh my god! **falls in love with story** LOL. Seriously though, it really was excellent. I'm so glad I found it on the boards, or I would have missed out ...

Well, Cassandra caught most of the grammatical/spelling errors and whatnot, so I guess that leaves me with the story as a whole. Some things I'd work on: 1. Flow. As ...

Happy birthday Meshy! **hands out celebratory penguins** :D

You're new, so I'll give you some advice: as a poetry topic, suicide sucks. It's been done 20 million times and generally is considered very amateurish and...well, cliche. And if ...

I second elein -- as it stands, this story is very confusing and difficult to read. Some points to think about: 1. Grammar. Oh my god. Grammar. And syntax. And ...

Charming, whimsical and elegantly written. I very much enjoyed it. I'll give it a second read later and see if I can find anything to critique properly, but at the ...

LL, I think, um...how can I say this tactfully? He hit the water with an enormous splash that momentarily paralised his body. Roger was knocked unconcious and his limp body ...

My new MC's main commandments (no particular order). Oh, and she's currently unnamed :oops: You shall honour and obey your husband in all matters. You shall prove yourself worthy of ...

Um. I think a better question would be, when WASNT I writing? Apparently at the age of two or three, I used to force my mum to make up stories ...

Interesting! Are you going to post it? I have to actually write it first! LOL. I might post it when its, say, in its second draft or something. Will let ...

Basically, my novel (haha! I feel so professional! But, seriously, it's just an idea right now :oops:) was inspired by a dream I had. I think. I have lots of ...

I'm an Arty fan too, LOL. I collect Colfer signed firsts so maybe that has something to do with it, but really I just love the stories ^_^

I'm with Clau. Going out of the house is not a good thing **hides under bed** Not that I'm agoraphobic or anything. But yeah. Outside is not a fun place ...