bubblewrapped

I agree with Cade; shopping list poetry like this gets pretty dull by the third line. The problem is that by listing things in the same way each time, you're ...

I'm gonna be blunt here and say I found it a bit boring and, essentially, pointless. It pretends to tell a story, but all of the important details beyond the ...

Yeah, it does make sense, and I understand what you're saying; I'm just pointing out that in this context what Ofour is referring to is the existence of someone who ...

While I agree (to an extent) with your conclusion, Meep, I think you're missing the point a little; when Ofour states that all a person can be sure about is ...

Oh my God, I can't believe I haven't seen this thread yet O_O Congrats on your progress thus far Brad :D

I'm currently studying for a BA in Religious Studies/Philosophy and I'm planning on becoming a professor in one or the other some day. So I'm definitely going to be writing ...

I just saw it on DVD. You can read my thoughts in detail here if you're so inclined. Otherwise, a quick summary: it could have been so much better. Points ...

I found the line breaks a little awkward, but in the end effective. The punctuation could be a little more consistent, perhaps? Otherwise, though, I found it strangely compelling. You ...

Yes, it is cliche. Not only the story ("I loved you and you didnt love me and so I killed myself") but also the approach to it - a bald, ...

Firstly, I would just like to thank you for rating this piece; nice to see people using the ratings system :) That being said, I'm afraid I must admit that ...

I agree with Brad - not a lot to be excited by. But a good attempt for your first real poem here :) I liked your imagery and the concept ...

Most likely to be a janitor: n/a YWS Clown: Mattster Most spirited: Loose Most chatty: Aet Linding - he's always in the chat XD Most Likely to End Up on ...

To be honest? I have no idea. All I know is it involved writing right through the night at least twice, and something about nachos in the chat at one ...

W00T! Just hit 50k!

Hard slog all day sees me at 46k and reaching for 47 to 48k before dinner time. Must...keep...writing... :smt024