bubblewrapped

I'm sorry, but I have to agree. Fix the spelling, grammatical and spacing errors and then I might be able to understand it well enough to give you a proper ...

Mmm. As a poem, this does very little for me. The antiquated language obscures more than it clarifies, in my opinion. Perhaps you could work on that. Oh, and I ...

Was there a purpose to this poem at all? Because I'm not getting it. Yes, leaves can turn beautiful colours and yes, that can make a great topic for a ...

Frankly? This poem outstayed its welcome by about five stanzas. Nitpicks: "Its" in the second stanza should be "It's" "accuse" should be "excuse" "dieing" is spelled "dying" "unknowing" would read ...

Cade has it in a nutshell. All that's really left to add is, there's more to poetry than just getting bored and deciding to write some :D If you're really ...

Agreed, this was very cute :D Jasmine seems to have covered the errors and nitpicky things, so I'll just say an obligatory "awww, Penguins!" :D Happy New Year, ~bubbles

Hello again! Lest you think I'm picking on you, 'm actually just going through reviewing those poems in each forum which have less than three critiques XD As to the ...

Yes, as Jasmine said, I'd cut down on the use of "and" - not just in the last line, though. I think it's over-used throughout this poem. Over run" should ...

Wow. I really liked this - especially the second stanza. I think it was the "acrobat-fell" idea that really hooked me, though I'm not sure why. One little nitpick; I'd ...

The idea was good, but it could have been expressed more strongly. If I were you, I'd take the concept of "in the eye of the war" and perhaps build ...

I loved the poking one in the beginnning, and that last one where your heads were all squishy XD The rest are kind of average and a bit pixelly, but ...

I'm with Cade. This is a regurgitation of all the bad pop songs out there. Your sentiment is strong, your message interesting - but your execution is poor. I suggest ...

I liked the first stanza, but after that it got a bit repetitive. Watch your punctuation and capitalization - it got a bit weird by the end. You might want ...

Just a tip - saying your poem is "really bad" isn't likely to garner many reviews ;) That said, it wasn't so terrible. The repetition of "if only" got old ...

Hmm. The colours are a little dull, but that could just be the quality of the image. An interesting pic. I like the effect of the orange circles - looks ...