bubblewrapped

I agree with both of the previous reviews re: punctuation and rhyming. Also, be careful of slipping into archaic language to plumb for a rhyme: "espies" makes it sound like ...

He doesn't know, that I need him. This is a good, strong beginning. You should follow it up immediately with something that leads into the 'story' of the poem. This: ...

To be honest, I think you've summed this up best yourself: This poem isn't meant for guilt, Isn't meant for tears, It only shows how I felt, Not meant for ...

I love the idea behind this, but I felt it was a little repetitive, particularly in the first few lines (say, from "World moves..." to "sun setting"). I think it ...

You have the form right, but something seems lacking. What I love about haikus is the way they can pack so much meaning into something so short. I can tell ...

My basic point, thunderdude, is simply that this interpretation only gels with the text if you take "that we may make a name for ourselves" on its own. In context, ...

OverEasy: In a way, I agree with you. Changing one's religion because one is "bored" seems to suggest very little investment in that religion to begin with. At the same ...

(i) All I get from the actual text is that the people wanted a name for themselves. I'm guessing this is taken to mean they wanted fame and/or notoriety, although ...

I tend to agree with Richard Dawkins that you aren't "born into" a religion at all. You're born to religious parents, and may be raised in a certain faith, but ...

Assuming for the moment that god does exist, and the story of Babel is true, the only way you could say god created racism was indirectly, since he created the ...

Hey! Your birthday is only 6 days after mine! *makes a note for next year* Happy Birthday, Nate ;)

I love animals, and it breaks my heart that sometimes they have to be 'put down.' That said, I think there are two instances in which this is morally justifiable. ...

I personally think the word "pride" is overused and needs a much tighter definition. defines it as all of the following: # a feeling of self-respect and personal worth # ...

In my personal opinion, religious schools do not have any place in a publicly funded system. If, however, one wanted to grant them that place then in the interests of ...

Well, you already know I like this XD So let's see...nitpicking time! Dark, empty and confined, [no comma] in a lightless, dirty room. [no full stop - the sentence carries ...