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All sorted, JFW1415 :) Cheers, ~bubbles

Hi JFW1415, Here’s your review, as requested :) In general, I quite like this poem. As you said, the idea is not a new one, but I like what you’ve ...

The ending was what made this poem for me. The idea of “pits of love” was simultaneously funny and fitting. The rest of it, though, suffers not only for being ...

Well, to be honest, I was came away feeling kind of meh about the poem. It seemed like you were trying to communicate something, but the point just never got ...

This was definitely a good start. I like the way you used the cement as a theme throughout. You need some practice when it comes to rhyming – a few ...

LOL I loved this; it’s light, but also carries some force and comes directly to the point. I guess you could say I found it charming (it also helps that ...

I liked it, and yet there was something lacking. I’m not quite sure what it was, so I’m going to go through verse by verse and see if I can ...

Sweet and simple - I like it :) It does get a bit tedious, the repetition of the same structure over so many verses, so you might want to think ...

I know you didn’t want people to focus on the punctuation, but I think it would help make sense of your poem, so I’m going to touch it up anyway, ...

There you go, guys, all done :) Cheers, ~bubbles

Hi KailaMarie! Here's your review, as requested :) I liked the imagery in this poem – your writing is very evocative. There were a few things I thought could be ...

Edited to add a rating. Please be sure to rate your work appropriately in future. Thanks :) Cheers, ~bubbles

A beautiful piece; stylistically accomplished and thematically unique. You did very well with the sestina (to the best of my limited knowledge, anyway) and I absolutely love some of the ...

That was beautiful! As I read it, it felt like I was half a step behind until then end, when everything came together and (like the poet's fingertips) exploded in ...

Hey CK Lynn! Here’s your review, as requested ;) Overall, I liked the poem; you stuck to the form very well and in several places the repetition was quite effective. ...