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I like this - short, sweet and succinct. I particularly liked the seven years - broken mirror, seven years bad luck, etc. Nice. The formatting of the lines of dialogue ...

I have to admit, this poem isn’t really my thing. That said, I think it’s fairly well written. A few things, though: 1. Some of your phrases are very awkwardly ...

While this was not exactly a highly original piece, I liked it. You have a good grasp of rhythm and the rhyming did not seem forced. I particularly liked the ...

Hm. I liked it, but at the same time it felt a little too bald - too much telling, not enough showing, I think. A girl feels sexy when she ...

I really like #2, Adna. It's odd, but it works XD

Actually, I quote like the concept of that last one, you just need to make it a bit clearer - tie the first and last verses together more clearly. All ...

April 6 Inside (Triolet - traditional) There is a door on which I knock Each morning. From the inside Comes a click; I turn the lock. There is a door ...

I absolutely love "Cake," Hannah. It's gorgeous.

April 5 Spare Flowers (Etheree) Sir Can you Spare me a Flower or two? I need them to twine Through my hair for a long Lost mother’s funeral. Her Favourites ...

On April 3 I did a bunch of limericks, which I will spare you the agony of reading, because they're horrendously bad. With the exception of this one, because it ...

I couldn't resist once I found the forum. I've been experimenting with different forms each day so far; some of them are complete rubbish, but others I am less displeased ...

I liked this. The message made it, I think, and I like the way it was so clearly and concisely put. The only real problem for me is that it's ...

This poem has a lot of potential, but there are some things I think you need to work on. The first is the punctuation; I think misfit went over that ...

Wow, that was actually very beautiful - I love the way it flows so simply. I think I'm going to be reduced to the nit-pickiest of nit-picking to give you ...

In many ways I really liked this, particularly the penultimate stanza; you’ve taken a subject that is somewhat cliché and turned it into an interesting and absorbing piece. That said, ...