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April 12 Looking Up (Dorsimbra) The curious eyes are always the first to turn their faces to the skies. On nights that burn as bright as this, the pull is ...

These are fantastic - I can't believe I missed your thread before! I especially liked say we are our secrets ; that ending was delicious. Cheers, ~bubbles

Absolutely beautiful. Particularly that first one - strikes a chord, for obvious reasons :) Cheers, ~bubbles

I've always been in awe of your poetry, Cal, so that really means a lot :) Thanks! April 11 Death of a Poet (Tritina) He asks for bodies in verse, ...

Thanks, Jigster :) April 10 Map of the Human Form, Asleep (Shakespearean Sonnet) I learn geography through fingertips Tracing the edges of a sleepy earth, Whose gentle curves rise up, ...

That was awesome, Crysi. I particularly loved the "my lips temble/at the fermata" line and the way there was *almost* an internal rhyme in each verse, but not quite (it's ...

The April 7 poem is lovely, Mars. Particularly the first and last stanzas. Cheers, ~bubbles

Nice Pantoum :D The only thing I'd change is that one long line - it looks a bit odd, sticking out from the rest like that. Otherwise, definitely a kick-butt ...

Thanks Mars :) April 9 Ballade to an Author Who Was the Cause of Much Pain (Ballade) Of those whose pens of distant places tell, I must confess that I ...

I apologize in advance for the absolute suck that is today's poem. Villanelles do not suit me, I'm afraid. April 8 Nostalgia Tastes Like Grapes (Villanelle) The grapes that summer ...

This was a lovely poem. The rhyme scheme felt a bit off, but I think that's just me anticipating rhymes where there aren't any lol. A few nitpicks; in places ...

I like that last one - the final verse is perfect! The punctuation is better too :) Cheers, ~bubbles

Cheers, Clo :) I'm rather partial to it as well, lol. April 7 Robin Hood Always Dies at the End (Terza Rima) When I still believed that heroes lived forever ...

I like this, but I think you need to develop it a bit. Why can't the narrator go home? What sense are we to take this in - is the ...

My suggestion for this poem would be to trim it down. Focus on one idea and explore it so that the poem has some clarity. I found it hard to ...