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(OOC: Sorry for the long delay, so busy with uni starting that I havent really been able to post properly - looks like you've been having fun in my absence, ...

Very empty. What colour fur does a Maltese terrier have?

No offense, Angel, but I have to agree with xanthan in some respects (ack, awful pun, sorry). It does appear that you have sacrificed the rhythm - and consequently the ...

Ha! I got sand too **looks smug** LMAO. Anyway, cant really critique it as a poem - because it's a riddle - but I will make a few general points: ...

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My skin is stretched so thin that people look straight through me. I have not light enough, nor strength enough, nor fixédness enough to shine; therefore I must like a ...

Granted! But every other guitarist becomes so jealous of your talent & success that they beat you to death with their guitar cases. I wish I was a successful rare ...

I loved this. I cant really critique it just cant be critiqued, IMHO. I dont want to spoil it. The thing I liked best was the way it kind of ...

First, let me say that the sentiment behind this poem was beautiful. The whole idea seemed to strike a chord with me, because I often think about my childhood (only ...

Cheers to all those girls alone on Valentine’s Day The wine sloshes within Crystal-clear glasses – If I were you, I'd change "within" to "in". "Within" sounds so...cliche. I dont ...

I'm going to be blunt. Can I be blunt? I'm sorry in advance. They call it blunt, but really, it can be quite painful. On this day there is no ...

Wow. I truly dont think there's anything I can say to that, but I will try anyway: Perfect.

HAHAHA! OMG I love it. Seriously. I love the rhythm here - it doesnt matter that the whyming is kind - OMG did I just type "whyming"? LMAO no more ...

I agree - lovely. The thing about haiku's is that there isnt enough there to really critique, LOL, so I'm stuck without much to say. Oh well. I loved it ...

Shadowdancers examples make no sense to me, but ... maybe thats just me. Personally, I use on or onto depending on which sounds better in the sentence, or which makes ...