bubblewrapped

There you go! Sorry about the wait, forgot to check the thread again -_- Cheers, ~bubbles

Hi again, Nice to see some editing going on :) I like this version; there is a clear progression in each verse, and they each add something new to the ...

Hi there, Here's your review, as requested :) Firstly, while I liked the concept of the poem, it felt a little - what's the word? Abrupt? Shallow? I kind of ...

I'm a hypochondriac - of course I'm worried. However, even I think the media is blowing this way out of proportion and I'm pretty annoyed at the irresponsibility of their ...

Sorry mizz-iceberg, looks like I didn't get there in time as the thread is locked :( Good luck in the competition!

The only thing I can see that is a problem here is a minor over-use of punctuation, which is easily cleared up XD Otherwise, this is a lovely piece - ...

Welcome to YWS :) You don't need to beg for feedback in the title, don't worry - we have an entire thread dedicated to that. Just follow the link in ...

This was an awesome concept and very creepy - well done. I do have some issues with the rhyming and the rhythm - both come across as kind of forced ...

An interesting concept, no doubt, but to be honest it really didn't hold my attention. I'm not sure why. I guess I felt that it seemed kind of purposeless - ...

Please don't bump old threads just to ask for more critiques - it unfairly adds to your review count and makes you look desperate ;). If you'd like people to ...

Please don't argue with the reviewers. They're taking the time to give you their opinion and deserve some respect. If you really don't care about people's advice or trying to ...

For someone who seldom (never?) writes poetry, you do seem to have a good grasp of the basics :) Class assignments can sometimes make for rather stiff work, so it ...

Against my better judgment, I kind of fell for this poem. It's sweet, and it follows the story well. You make it clear how the narrator feels without being overly ...

This was simple and straightforward, but competently handled. A couple of nit-picks before I start: you don't need to repeat "love is dangerous" at the end of that stanza (it ...

mizz_iceberg has pretty much covered everything I was going to say, so I'll just add a couple of general points. Firstly, I think you could probably have condensed this whole ...