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  • Art & Photography Re: My Fallen Heart

    That is so cool! I love it, pinks not my favorite color, but I still liked it. I like the way the black faded and how the pink inside was ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Art & Photography Re: White Witch

    Wow, I could NEVER do that in my computer! I can barely write my own name! Good job, dude!

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Abracadabra (Edited)

    It was really sweet, I liked it. I couldn't help but feel bad for the boy, deceit is never the answer, but I'd probably clap too. Nice words by the ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Hope

    I liked it, and very much agree the new piece is better than the old. It has a lot more details, really, very good, but I also agree with the ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Voices

    I really liked it and agree that you should write with your darker side more often. But of course, I love dark poetry, but you're very good at it and ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Breaking Me

    I actually like the last four lines and the imagery was very good. I could feel the agony and despair, awesome! It does need a little work, but not much. ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: A Little Boulder (Bolder)

    Is it really about a boulder? Well, either way, it's really good. XD

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: My Princess

    I really loved this poem, especially since I feel the same way, today in this world, people are so hyprocritical, but really, it was an awesome poem. This will definetly ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Powerless

    This is really good, very deep. I really like it, this is something I wouldn't definetly rate a high score for. Good job, dude, (I call everyone dude, so please ...

    Jan 26, 2011
  • Welcome Mat Re: Me!

    I've been writing poetry for 7 years. I used to sing, but when I saw poetry for what it truly is, I decided I wanted to that. So I worked ...

    Jan 26, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: A Winter Walk [EDITED]

    I liked it a lot, but there's really no flow. If people have said this already sorry, I haven't read the comments yet. But the imagery is awesome, and your ...

    Jan 26, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Finally

    I’ve finally gotten rid of you. You’re finally gone from my mind. At first, I didn’t know what I’d do without you. Now I don’t need you. I’m finally ready ...

    Jan 26, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Romeo and Juliet: A Poem

    It was meant to be a twist or Rome and Juliet, but thank you. What I was trying to say was the Juliet had found her Romeo dead, they had ...

    Jan 26, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: The Waiting

    Amazing, really truly amazing. You sound like you've been writing forever. You sound like a professional on this. I'm actually speechless, but really that was awesome, I loved it.

    Jan 26, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Bitten

    Good, but like I tell everyone else, use more figurative language. Give some more imagery and hyperboles. It is good though, just needs some work. When I started writing my ...

    Jan 26, 2011


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien