brokeninpieces

I really like it. Especially the vulnerability I felt coming from the narrator. I felt kind of remorseful for the woman. What made you write this? Did you have an ...

I really like it. Very meaningful and emotional, kind of. Good idea, though.

Oh my God I loved it! It does need a little work, but not very much. I just love all of it, really, it's good. Dark, morbid, my kind of ...

I get it! Yeah! Ok, it's not bad, I like it. It reminds me of some of my friends' families, always pretending who they're not. They pretend to be happy ...

The Darkness was a mysterious thing. It came when it wanted; there was no pattern to its sinister visits. The Darkness was a shadow, a shadow that would bring all ...

Awesome, really emotional but something people can really relate too. I feel like this with my parents and friends. I hide behind a mask and the only way I let ...

Thanks people! :D When I do edit it, I'll keep your advice in mind, but right now I'm trying to make a happy poem for this contest my English teacher ...

Thank you everyone, and thank you for the good advice. I write a lot of my poetry off of things that happened to me, or I just pretend I'm that ...

Oh thank you, and I'm glad you could relate to it. It happened to me after the guy I really truly cared about decided to end it, we had to ...

I've felt like that before, it was kind of morbid. Not bad though, just kinda sad. I could feel some anger though. What exactly made you write it?

I like it, sad and kind of angry, but really good. It does need some work though, there's a few words I'd change. But it is good and I've written ...

It was good but needs some work. It was really sweet though, good luck with the girl! ;D

I agree with Lily, it's very good and I love the sexual feel of it. And I love how it pretty much disses cities and says that nature in general ...

I watched him disappear with a final wave of his hand and a faint flicker of his smile. I watched the love of my life leave me without a tear ...

I love it! The last part was my favorite. And it doesn't matter if it was more than one haiku put together, it just makes it original. I love it ...