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Why thank you good sir :)

Yeah, the rhythm doesn't really match there, but then again there is never really a set rhythm in the poem. Also, I added in the part about the english class ...

Thank you very much; ironically, this is actually a poem that was supposed to be written to the style of "Knoxville, Tennessee" but I decided to mix it up a ...

There is a white wall In my english class It always Captivates me Staring into space and Looking at the Stars and feeling Nothing But when I see them On ...

Most of the "books" that you mentioned, about teenagers and the activities you mentioned, don't tell a story as fulfilling as this. You wrote twice as good a story as ...

I did not really want to edit this piece, it was really written as an experiment for what I can come up with when I free-write (as in, writing whatever ...

Ironically, this was never meant to be a preview, I was simply writing whatever came to mind. But thank you, and I hope you do enjoy the full, improved version!

Yes, I agree with you that there are several blunders in the story. I had intended on fleshing out the characters more, and giving them depth, through flashbacks. Perhaps I ...

I really liked this, alot. It is poetic, tells a story, has meaning-it has everything that you'd want in a poem, quite frankly. I can't exactly nitpick this a whole ...

getsuyōbi The has a stillness to it. The trees seem lifeless to me; perhaps I am lifeless to them. I notice a well-dressed couple of young age passing by. They ...

Even for such a short piece, it is pretty interesting, and poetic, at that. However, with it's shortness comes problems. I am not even slightly engrossed in this story, because ...

Ziggiefred, thank you very much. I appreciate the kind words. Master Yoda, also thank you very much, not just for your ending kind words, but for the advice. What I ...

Awesome writing style! About halfway through I was wondering if there was gonna be another part, but the way it ends is absolutely perfect. There is detail in your writing ...

A vivid picture is painted, but much of what you write is nonsense. Keep up the good writing style, though.

I like your writing style, especially when it paints a vivid picture in my head. I especially like the bit about the hearth and the warm cocoa; it contrasts the ...