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Re: Friends in Flesh
First off, I LOVED the ending quotation. It really did a good job at bringing the entire thing together, and it cleared many things up. The use of the word ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: What I Think About In Math
Well that was...unexpected. In a good way, though, for the most part at least. Once you said "pondering" I was expecting some really deep, insightful, math-related thoughts. And while this ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: The Six Wonders of Becoming Insane
I. A walk through a Japanese garden I'm walking now, very slowly. The leaves bristle as a slight breeze passes. The trees start to shake. No, no, I tell myself. ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: An Ugly Girl
I really liked this. Your writing style is absolutely wonderful, though a little confusing at times. But it's a good kind of confusing! At the end I was asking myself ...
Nov 20, 2011 -
Re: Fantastic Miraculous Day
I just wanna say, these are the worst lyrics I have ever written. I've actually speedwritten for this premise of a "fantastic miraculous day" and they turned out better than ...
Mar 27, 2011 -
Re: Fantastic Miraculous Day
FANTASTIC-ALLY, MIRACULOUS-LY Roads of neon red and blue Peaches biting bread and true Stories being told This is getting old Tired of the lies, GONNA KILL SOME FLIES FANTASTIC-ALLY, MIRACULOUS-LY ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: Not a home
Thanks! I tried to create a central theme that would stick throughout, then completely change it while still keeping the original theme.
Feb 5, 2011 -
Re: Not a home
The house is not a home When the people living there aren't really there. When the mother, the father, the son and daughter shift in and out of existence with ...
Jan 28, 2011 -
Re: You are science.
Thank you very much! I think there are some really cheesy areas that I want to edit, but I think that won't be any time soon.
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: You are science.
Haha thanks! To be honest, and this is to all of you out there, I do not think I wrote this poem as well as I really could have. There ...
Jan 19, 2011 -
Re: You are science.
Thanks! :)
Jan 18, 2011 -
Re: You are science.
Haha, those are two problems I noticed myself too, but I really didn't even try to fix them, because I liked it just the way it was. Thank you for ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: You are science.
Haha thanks, I don't really see my self explaining it further because part of why I really am proud of this piece is the sense of mystery. Also, I had ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: 9:49
It's there to not interfere with the "the line is drawn" part. In other words, I wanted to stick that in there to keep with the rhyme scheme of the ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: 9:49
It may seem weird, but I did that on purpose. "out of the" seems WAY too generic to me, but "out of blue" just flows nicer, which is the idea ...
Jan 17, 2011
