brassnbridle

I'm a bit confused about the second part. You said everybody died aside from the king and the general, who sound like their yelling back and forth with the king ...

I think your piece reads like a parody so far, as so many details (like how he got expelled from schools and whatnot) are so close to the main series. ...

I like how you kept pretty consistent with the books, but some of your paragraphs felt rushed. He felt this, she said that- I know you've probably been told or ...

Again, another good story. I liked the way you presented an insight into their history, the how and why your MC ended up working for a knight she doesn't like. ...

Well I really liked this. I thought it was well-done and interesting, though the actual poisoning I didn't get until I went through and read it again. I'm not sure ...

Interesting, I admit. Parts of it, like her dream, remind me of the first Percy Jackson book. Not sure if it's supposed to or not, but that's what i thought ...

Thank you everybody for your reviews and suggestions! Much appreciated!

Dracven did not have to wait long. The lord did not devote much time to eating; soon he and his men had finished, and he signaled in the guard. Instantly ...

I thought this one felt a little rushed, but it was still very good. I don't have anything to add to the actual story, so I'm going to nit-pick some ...

Good opening- first sentence caught me right away. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, which is always a plus. I can't even see much to change- everything flowed ...

If you can guess, this is a Harry Potter fanfic. It takes place during the first book, after Harry and Hermione split up at the potion riddle and while Harry ...

Interesting- I like it. You've added to the depth and mystery of the story. The punctuation was much better in the edited parts, but ran away again in the stuff ...

Well, I finished it. Can't say I overly enjoyed it- just not my type of story. All my comments are on here. I used Microsoft 2007 with the tracking changes- ...

I'm afraid I can't think of much other to say than I like it! It's easy to read and engaging enough to want to continue, though a few stretches when ...

First, I want to say I liked the actual story. I love the mystery surrounding your MC and I was excited to finally find a story that uses archery! The ...