brassnbridle

Definitely... Interesting. I must admit, I've never read a book where the main character dies in the first chapter. :) Now, I want you to know this- you have a ...

This is funny and sad at the same time. Your eight year old has remarkably good vocabulary! Congrats on getting him/her interested in writing at such a young age. The ...

I glanced up as the door opened, and had to restrain myself from rolling my eyes. Not them- a few of the more racous boys from the village. Of course, ...

This was very neat! I love the fact your characters spoke in old english, even if not exactly proper. It gave your story a very different feel from most of ...

I preferred the first way, where your main characters were living through the battle as it unfolded. Narrating it to the little boy came across as kind of phony to ...

First, I thoroughly enjoy this piece. So if you ever find you need/want something else to work on, continue this and let me know. I love your MC and how ...

I had been no more than a few blocks away the whole time. I banged my head on the pillar. Oui, I’m stupid. Which is to be expected after you ...

First- under normal circumstances you just hit tab. You can't indent on YWS- at least I've never seen it. Don't ask me why. And giant blocks of text very easily ...

Your writing is pretty solid and it flowed well- that part was very good. No grammar or punctuation errors that I caught. *Cerian is the MC's arch nemesis *Araminta is ...

I just want to say- if you publish this, let me know where. I'm really enjoying this - keep it up. As for the review- I felt he acted younger ...

This was very interesting- I enjoyed it alot. I'm not the type who usually thinks much about what's going through the bad guys' heads, but I think you did a ...

Ok I just wrote an entire review and was about to submit it when it disappeared, so I'm ticked. Now, I did get a slight Percy Jackson feel, but considering ...

Its interesting, all right. I'm curious enough to see what happens next. I have to admit, though, that I didn't find myself overly heartbroken at the deaths of the two ...

I have to admit, I wasn't very hooked on the story until you mentioned her performing magic. After that I was very interested to see how it panned out. I ...

I enjoyed it. At first I was totally puzzled as to why what was going on was, but those kind of questions are what keeps a reader reading. (If that ...