brassnbridle

This was good! I can tell you put alot of time and thought into this. I like how you've kept the character dynamics and everything, and the idea of Harry, ...

I believe this is in the wrong place. Advanced critiques are for books, usually added as an attachment. This is probably better suited to the fantasy section.

First of all, I want to agree that this was well-written and well-polished, and probably has a great deal of potential. I don't want to depress you in that respect. ...

kk thanks

I hope this isn't another stupid question, but I've noticed the edit signature thing is rather messed up. The character counter will tell me I only have two hundred and ...

I agree with the rushed and slightly emotionless feel, but it was definately well-done even with that. He didn't even have to look to know what it was... Blood. . ...

Ah, thanks. Didn't see that.

“Why would anyone want to kill me? I haven’t done anything to anyone, other than knock out a few drunks here and there." Salven left the busy tavern he'd been ...

All right, not sure where to ask this so I'm just going to shoot. I haven't been around for a while, so maybe i missed something, but where is the ...

Thanks! Shouldn't it be that they were scouting out two half-bloods, so therefore it should say "and pulling 'them' from 'their' perfectly..." Originally there was only one half-blood, then a ...

I agree with it being realistic enough for a reader to grasp. Besides, sometimes teens unfortunately commit suicide for much much stupider reasons that don't really make any sense to ...

Nice- it definitely has a good hook. I can tell you've put a lot of work into this. I'm interested to find out what's so dire about the Day of ...

Wow, thanks for opinions and in-depth reveiws. Yes, I would definitely read this book if I picked it up at the library. In fact, I have a habit of reading ...

Just want to say that your font is rather small and the text is in giant, intimidating boxes, which could make it difficult to get reviews. Try breaking it up ...

This might not be your favorite part, but I think it's necissary. At least for me, I know I get frustrated when too many of the character's questions get left ...