brassnbridle

I understand the novel rule but I feel kind of trapped. My complete book is some 68,300 words long. I don't want to screw something up, but I also wonder ...

All my suggestions are in here:

This was origionally the second part of a two-part into, but I noticed that it was a little long for a YWS post, so I broke it into two shorter ...

I thought it was very well written- just caught one line I didn't see mentioned above. “Forgive me your greatness but I do not understand,” She said. There's no pauses ...

Pretty good, but as one person said, nearly every sentence is a run-on sentence. If you try reading it aloud, you'll notice how awkward it is. Try breaking sentences up ...

This is a new idea I'm toying with... Any feedback is appreciated- what do you think? Does it catch you? etcetera. ~ ~ ~~ ~ ~ I couldn’t sleep. I ...

I agree with the posts above- you need to work on developing your characters, especially your main one. What sort of thoughts does he have, other than hesitation about becoming ...

I want to look into publishing a fantasy book that's been my pet project for a while now, and I'm feeling kind of lost. Does anyone have any suggestions on ...

Thanks for the replies, everyone. My computer's been down for a while, so my yws work has gone untouched, but I plan on getting back to it now that I ...

thank you- I'd been pretty sure she was a girl but i wasn't positive. As a result, I think you need to tell us more about Angi, so we understand ...

I haven't read the previous chapters, but this one was really good, with good description and grammar. The only thing was that Levi's character didn't seem very deep, but maybe ...

Your story and characters are flat- nobody seems to say or do anything with any emotion. Also, I know the fifth book is long, but its very confusing when you ...

You've got a lot of good things going here- your descriptions are really good most of the time. But wow, you have a lot of run-on sentences. It takes away ...

Thanks- that was crazy fast!

Hi, would you mind reading a star wars story? It's based during the clone wars series. If your interested, Masters, Padawans, and Mysteries: a Clone Wars tale fanfiction, of course