borntobeawriter

Okkkkkkkkkkay now. Hi Skins! Just read your first chapter and all the comments and there's one thing I just don't get. You begin by saying that he just met his ...

Hey there Dragnet, Tanya here for a review! But the desire inside of me was unsatisfied, no matter what I did. It was unlike any other need that I had ...

Hey Storyweaver, I'm Tanya and I loved this prologue. It was intriguing but I have to agree with Mochi. There is no hook at the beginning, no description and the ...

Chapter 10 The four beasts facing us were huge and snarling. The beasties’ coats were dark and matted with filth. Their eyes were red and round, like twin marbles. The ...

Hey there Etherealember!! Here for a review! Famous people should shut up sometimes Haha, I laughed out loud to this one. So very very true. In the Kingdom Sylvester had ...

Back again for the second review!! So!” Mr. Landsin exclaimed, slamming a dusty old book down on his desk, and peering at us over his tiny glasses. The smell wafted ...

Hey there Kerza, I'm Tanya, here for a review! “Oh, really?” I asked Vincent as I put my backpack on the living room floor, beside the couch. “Yes, I could ...

Hey there Shadowlight! Dude, you have issues with Pink! LOL Seriously, great work. The story has its issues, but they were already commented on. I must say that this is ...

Hey Pink! I was stalking this thread and discovered you had edited. Great job! I much prefer Eve in this version. I would advise, though, that you go back and ...

Hey Pink! Welcome back friend! Here's a few nitpicks, So…if I calculated correctly, the total amount of this fine looking dress, with the twenty percent off, plus the extra fifty ...

Hey Lauren...Still waiting for the next chapter........:D

Hey there Zibbie! Like Lauren said before me, it was a good intriguing start to a story, but a confusing one I found. I mean, Lauren's right; at some points, ...

Ok guys. Next chapter is up. I just wanted to mention that Riley and Shanna won't commit to anything just yet. I must admit that I tried to get them ...

Oh wow! I'd love to have someone start a critique of my work this way but that's not important here lol :lol: Very beautifully written, very evocative. I could clearly ...

Not only am I first, I'm second! That sucks! I hate it when people just pass by without commenting. Well, nothing's changed since yesterday. Still love the chapter and I ...