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Thanks for your review! I'm trying to figure out spaces and everything, but thanks for the input!

Hello! Booky here to review, comments in bold! Rebecca: She always said that the world looked brighter from her shoes Eeks! Somehow this sentence is grammatically incorrect. I might sound ...

Hello! Booky here to review, comments in bold! Rebecca: She always said that the world looked brighter from her shoes Eeks! Somehow this sentence is grammatically incorrect. I might sound ...

Hello! Booky here to review, comments in bold! Rebecca: She always said that the world looked brighter from her shoes Eeks! Somehow this sentence is grammatically incorrect. I might sound ...

You are so right- my teacher is constantly on my back about "grandiloquence"! I'll tone it down in the actual essay. Thanks so much for your review! Btw, 1984 is ...

Hello, Booky here to review, comments in bold! "Where can i find her?" He stumbled into the bar for the fourth time this week. I really like the opening-sets the ...

Thanks so much! I'll be sure to specify with the characters!

Hello, Booky here to review! Comments are in CAPS) It is dark. The winding labyrinth lets in no light HMMM NOT TO SOUND PICKY, BUT WHY WOULD THE LABYRINTH LET ...

Hello, Booky here to review! Comments are in CAPS) It is dark. The winding labyrinth lets in no light HMMM NOT TO SOUND PICKY, BUT WHY WOULD THE LABYRINTH LET ...

Booky here to review, comments in bold! Accusing eyes pass somehow the word pass doesn't do it for me here, it breaks the flow an uncaring i know it's nitpicky, ...

Thanks so much! I find out my grade for it tomorrow, so we'll see if my english teacher feels the same way!

Thanks so much for the input! This was for an english assignment in September (which I never got back...) that was to write a chapter-ish thing on a moment in ...

Sorry about the formatting, I couldn't use the tab button, one it looks rather mushed. Also, I never really had the opportunity to recopy the edited version- I'll be sure ...

I really enjoyed reading this piece. I love the relativity of time gone passed, and I think you did a very nice job in the execution.

I totally agree with the vocab points-not my favorite part either. The essay is not quite finished-I'll put up the conclusion soon. Thanks for all the commentary!