bookworm201

I haven't written anything beyond this point- not sure if the charctersa are interesting enough. Would continue with elements of fantasy in the future if I continued. Nettie brushed Meghan’s ...

Good story, very artful reveal of characters. Grammar not the sharpest- try to avoid comma splices. Some of the earlier "he"'s aren't specific. Try to clarify that. Also try describing ...

Overall, a good story. Your expression of emotion and way of introducing suspense and tension is great. Two things that you could work on: 1. You do need to establish ...