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She was everything. As I lay tonight, I cannot help but think of her. How her cute little face made the smile that won her my heart since the first ...

yeah, oit could be quite confusing at first but it is awfully fun here.. :)

shucks! haven't read this thread for quite a long time, anyways thanks for welcoming me two years ago, anyways, i'm on my track of being a writer again and on ...

thios a nice way to attack whatever you wanted to say... i like your use of spaces... new paragraphs every now and then... you seemed to know the inner self ...

yeah, this is anice story... short as it may seem, its brevity and fullness would scarcely go unnoticed... i love the way you let the readers feel the tension (internal ...

This is one good piece. you have developed fully the characterization of characters... antagonism is of two-level--intra- (within himself arguing whther to stay on or to go) and interpersonal (that ...

You got such a solid characterization of both your characters. the length of your piece was just suitable enough to let them mature... it was romantic as it is supposed ...

hey fellows... wish i could be a good memeber of this community. in tne past few days that i've been doing stuff here, i find this really useful and entertaining. ...

This is just remarkable. In that very short story,you were able to develop fully the characterization of your characters. you have a great command of tools in evoking who the ...

I won't pretend that i'm quite good critiquing... anyway... you got a good only concern though was that you focused so much with minor details... and consequently left the major ...

I won't pretend that i'm quite good critiquing... anyway... you got a good only concern though was that you foucused so much with minor details... and consequently left the major ...