bludragon525

Hey! Okay, lot of mistakes in this one. You misuse some commas, and as far as I can tell, frighten should be PAST TENSE. So listen and listen well should ...

Hey! I like this piece, but it doesn't have that message that connects the reader to the author. It lacks the emotional pull that keeps the reader's interest. Maybe you ...

Hey! As everyone has already said, there is a separate forum for lyrics. You should put this there. I agree with almost all of the reviewers above me. The lyrics ...

Hey! Great idea. Your rhyming rule didn't really help the poem at all, though; in fact, it made it a little more confusing than it could be. Remember, poems don't ...

I Am I Am, yet what [s]i[/s] I am , none cares or knows . I Am forsaken by my friends like a memory lost . I Am the self ...

Hello again. Thanks for the warm welcome. Favorite books and authors? I have way too many to count. *sigh* My all time favorites include The Blue Girl by Charles de ...

Great job on this! I can't wait to see where this goes. Basket and Retrogradatory basically said it all for me, except for one thing.... And so I believed them. ...

A Bridge of Colors A bridge of colors hangs motionless in the sky. Rays of color play across the sidewalk, still wet from the storm that just passed. I long ...

Hey. Great job! There's just a few things I'd like to say..... "It is my scar" and "It is my wound" are a bit redundant. As Jon said, we, the ...

Good job! I love it. The only thing that bothered me is the second stanza. The rhyming rule doesn't fit in with the rest of the poem. See if you ...

Hey dogs. Okay, so where do I start? I suppose I should start out first that this isn't exactly a poem. I'm not sure that I've ever read a poem ...

Hey dogs! I know you! Welcome to YWS, although I'm new here too. :D

Hey! My name's Zoe, but a lot of people call me zo zo, zoobers, or just plain Zoe. My friend told me about this website after several years of emailing ...