bludragon525

Hey! I liked your introduction. It's short, but good. Maybe you should lengthen it a little bit? I was never a normal kid. New beginning, perhaps? This one just gets ...

Hey! Awesome poem!!! I don't quite understand the click and the finger part. What does it have to do with the poem? You had a few spelling mistakes. If you ...

Hey! Um, I don't think I really got the point/meaning of this poem. As far as I can tell, you're death, and that's about it. What are you trying to ...

Hey! Good poem. I didn't really get it at first, but after reading it a couple of times, it finally made sense. I think it would be a bit easier ...

Hey! Wow..... That kept me captivated from the very start. Well done! The wind whipped at my hair like an angry beast, whispering dark secrets into my ears. The street ...

Hey! Great poem. It brought out the little kid in me, when I would complain about practicing the violin..... But back to the point. Stop it you metal brick; Just ...

Hey! If I'm correct, this is the lyrics for a song. It doesn't belong here. There's a lyric section if you scroll farther down on the forum index. I can't ...

Hey! Please ignore dogs. He doesn't know what he's saying. I loved your poem. It was a bit confusing, but after reading it again, I understood everything. Your rhyming rule ...

Hey! Great poem! I loved the rhyming part in the first couple of lines; however, it really does break in that one section. It's confuses the reader, and it DOES ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm rather new here too, seeing that I joined a couple of days ago, but I already love this site. Hopefully you will too. :) Yeah, ...

Hey! Wow meggy. You had me captivated from the first stanza. There isn't much I would do to change it. I thought it was already very powerful. The theme was ...

Hey! Great poem! I liked it a lot. However....... I didn't think the poem flowed very well. As kris said, it was a little uncomfortable to read. Until isn't really ...

Hey! Great job, as usual. There just was one thing that I didn't quite understand that the reviewers above me didn't mention. I shocked myself by chuckling three times and ...

Hey! This poem didn't really flow as well as I would have thought. The lines weren't thought out very well, and the whole poem itself didn't really make sense. I ...

Hey! I liked your poem. There were just a few things... The last stanza confused me. By that, I mean it didn't really fit in with the rest of the ...