bloodyblackrose

hmm. mediocre. you make it seem as if there's only two ways to live: abide by the system or be an outcast. your poem makes it sound as if being ...

Love is fake, false, full of lies Love is pain, hurt, agonizing screams Love is being alone, dreaming for daylight, sobbing Love is believing in someone who is shallow and ...

okay so i have almost no idea what this poem is about. i got the helen of troy allusion. the first part made me think maybe vampires? lol. second and ...

this is a beautiful poem. the imagery is absolutely amazing. yeah, it is a typical rhyme scheme but it fits. i think this poem would be really cool as a ...

favorite lines: From the earth, myself I must scrape, I hope my death is on your plate. a bit confusing, but that might just be because its been a long ...

well short sonnets like these usually aren't broken into stanzas anyway, hence my block format. my rhyme scheme was: a, b, a, b, c, d, c, d, e, f, e, ...

i completely relate to this poem. there isn't very much imagery but that's okay by me because sometimes poems without imagery are refreshing. it keeps you from having to analyze ...

right so, you've edited this since i last read it :) the only problem i saw was grammatical: putting her under much to deep. ((putting her under much too deep.)) ...

i definitely thought the last stanza was the best. "Till the morning dawn breaks, and his soul flees his dead vessel I find myself alone in an angel's embrace her ...

Can I ever escape this emptiness? I don’t know how to erase these feelings. All this murdering pain and hollowness. My broken heart you’re constantly stealing. What else could you ...

thanks for the critiques. and yes, im aware i used some evanescence lyrics. that was the intent - - if you know the songs then you know the emotion behind ...

you definitly need to continue this poem. it is amazing so far, and i dont see anything wrong with it. i love that she is in an 'ocean of hate'. ...

i really liked this poem. despite a few grammatical errors and typos it was pretty good. but the beginning was a bit confusing because it wasnt clearly specified what "disappeared" ...

i like your title. it draws the reader in. and the way you have your poem centered rather than just aligned left like most are. its creative. and i like ...

i like the moral your poem took. it was something different. and your rhyme scheme was simple but good. it was kind of sad, and melancholy. those kinds of poems ...