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Prologue It’s raining outside. Hunting prey in the dead of night, Before him, victim’s run in fright, The wielder of the sacred light. It’s raining outside. Blessed sword of silver ...

What you are about to read is the journal of Eric Lum. His story involves a reluctant stay with his cousins that ended up changing his life, a good friend, ...

Good story but i just found some things you might want to know about. [“Hey! Don’t you dare make fun of Lizzy!”? Allie yelled.] Why is there a question mark ...

Wow! Very interesting and gory! (I hope that's what you were aiming for) I liked your style. Just a few things. "These newest boys the company had outsourced had finally ...

Hi I've seen some of your work and I like it! Except for one thing. Your style seems to be to use slang internet terms like saying "u" instead of ...

The sky caught fire as the sun sank into the trees. That’s all there ever is around here, trees. They are all so tall and quiet, Kirthin thought. From the ...

Good story! I need to keep my reviews up so here's the stuff. "I was dreaming I was wandering in the middle of a golden field. The surrounding sea of ...

Great job! I know I'm only a Junior Writer but I have to keep the 2:1 review rule thingy, so... Anyway, yeah, you can choose to ignore all of this ...

Welcome to the Land of Chisst, young wanderer. Although, you may be old, I cannot tell through these pages. So you wish to hear the tale of Kirthin the mage? ...

I edited this now using the help you guys gave me so, for other readers, you might not see the things being commented on! Just to clear up some confusion!

Okay , thank you.

Thanks again for your comments, people! I would like you to know that I am not ignoring your comments, but that really isn't enough for me to rewrite the entire ...

Chapter I: Lessons The last remnants of fleecy white clouds were dyed blood red as the sun sank into the valley. Kirthin sighed. These few last hours of the day ...

Thanks! I'm going to re-post an improved version of this using your helpful hints. Just one clarification. When Kirthin calls Searle a "fool", he's actually joking around, pretending to be ...

Good job! Except one part were the Zombie Watch Committee guy answers the phone saying "Brains?" Wouldn't one be a bit suspicious? Strange way to awnser the phone i think