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Yo, it's blackpencil here to review your work. Starting off, you didn't desribe ANYTHING. You barely desribed the Black Lake, you hardly described the monster, and you didn't decribe the ...

Arr, I be blackpencil an' I be 'ere to review yer work, landlubber! So anyway, I like how you didn't infodump the character's appearances. A lot of people to that ...

Hello, this is blackpencil here to review your work! First off, you changed tenses from past to present in only two sentences. You got to watch that. Also, your sentences ...

Hey, I'm blackpencil and I'll review your work today. First of all, sorry to say it, but this story made me feel as if it was written by a kid. ...

I thought this was really good, acutally, but maybe you overdid the depression level a bit? When you came across it you should've rewritten the end to make it end ...

Wow I liked that. It was sort of confusing though, but I guess it wasn't really supposed to make sense. It seemed to me that this was a very symbolice ...

That was HALARIOUS!!!I meant to spell that wrong, yes... That's pretty much Star Wars I in a box. Good job! I love how Qui-gon called Maul a noob... n OMG ...

Hi it's blackpencil again and I would like to review this first part of the first chapter. " I f I’m alive, then I have to spend every day of ...

Wow. I love it. Sorry, I'm afraid we're out of ripping to shreds in the blackpencil department, but would you care for some praise? First of all, I love how ...

Hello, bonjour, hallo, ola, ciao, whatever thou speaketh, I am Mr. blackpencil and I wish to review your work, thank you very much. Okay! Let's begin. First of all... AAAAARGH!!! ...

Chapter II: New Horizons Kirthin woke early the next morning refreshed and ready. He quickly washed, pulled on a simple brown tunic and went downstairs for a bite to eat ...

Nice job. I myself have been reading narrative poetry because I am interested in writing my own. You were right, you do have punctuation errors, but I'm not going to ...

Laelia seemed to hot here, in her striped over sized sweater that was curled at her wrist. She sat with 19-year old Zack and some of his friends, Morgan and ...

Stupid computer crashed and I lost all my data. I had to start over again. Darned technology... grrr... :evil: Chapter I: A Crimson Dawn The sky caught fire as the ...

Wow. Near perfect grammar, no infordumps, not too fast, not boring, simply amazing. I LOVE IT! It smelled like fresh paint and old books, and maybe a little mold. There ...