blackpencil

This was a poem I thought up when I saw a smashed robin's egg on my way home from school. Please mangle it, I have no idea how to do ...

Hi I'm blackpencil, how are you doing? First of all, starting your poem with "Yet I feel" isn't quite right. The word "yet" implies that you are continuing a sentence ...

That was good! I'm not the type to pick and pry,I'd rather let YOU find out for yorself. So here's the jist of things: You messed up on some grammar. ...

Wow! Thanks for all the reviews! I'll be sure to post the first chapter up soon.

Hi it's me again and I need to give you a review! Waking up from a warm, comfortable sleep is rather like a feather slowly drifting down from the top ...

I was extremely moved by "The Diary of Anne Frank", so I decided to write this book. This is not a hate literature, no matter what my views of the ...

Kay, got your message and I'm here to drop a comment. Nothing personal, but I like the other one better. It was shorter, like a prologue is supposed to be. ...

Hello, I'm blackpencil and I'll review this piece today. I liked the story, to start, especially the names. They're very creative, and sound like mysterious aliases or codenames. I like ...

I don't feel like being majorly over-harsh today, so you're in luck... Just kidding, it was a good piece! Just a few things... The looking glass mirror hanging over the ...

In reply to one of your replies, sorry about your grandpa. My regards. In reply to your story, good job! I hope you didn't write this piece to dwell forever ...

Meh, not as funny as the first one, but still pretty good. You missed some important deatils that would have been funny to add. Like when Mace beheads Jango. Yeah, ...

Chapter III: New Students In front of them was a large, sweeping lawn. The students themselves were standing in a stone circle carved with the same runes from the portal ...

Wow. Good photo. You mixed up the colours, I see. It gives the picture a nice contrast. But it doesn't strike me as extraordinary. You need something more visually striking ...

...Wow. That was really good. I love how you got the idea for the story (Yes, I read the intro). When I first started reading I thought, "Am I seeing ...

I like the imagery. Very good, a subtle hint of sadness mixed with the good memories. A lot of people have already mentioned the grass, so I won't. Oh wait, ...