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I don't know if this will help but try replacing light and darkness with love and hatred and the rhythm at the beginning wasn't intentional .-. I know what you ...

I'll do it! Logo's where the first things we learned about in computer graphics 1, so I kinda want to test what I've learned. ^-^

And in that moment My heart breaks a little more As though all lights been taken And buried under the floor Smothered in darkness With no escape That's how my ...

One, it's not really clear about what's going on. Two, the grammar is just terrible. I'd say just make it clearer, fix the grammar issues, and try not to repeat ...

thank you for the advice! I'll definitely continue it then ^-^

As her tears fall down, They don't even make a sound As they hit the floor, They made all her sorrows real She was lost in an ocean, Filled with ...

Hello, I really like this poem and how you went from Juliet in the first stanza to Romeo in the next two then smoothly back to Juliet for the last ...

Well I was really going for setting and leaving imagery up to the reader's imagination. I would have put more punctuation and paid more attention to the words but i'm ...

Thank you everyone for your advice and critics. I appreciate it a lot. ^-^

Falling rain In the blowing wind On a cloudy day During a hurricane Dancing in the sea Near a beautiful field Over grown with flowers In cased in a soft ...

Happiness is all I ask But what I'm given is a mask It hides the fake tears well But only making the hurt swell I want so badly to scream ...

I like it. It's really good, but seems to missing something. Like it wants to be something but it's not. I'm not one to judge but maybe it's a presence ...

For two in the morning it's a very likable poem ^-^ short, sweet, and to the point. :D

thank you ^-^ The advice I've gotten has really helped a lot! So thank you very much :D

Sorry about the bad Spelling and stuff. I kinda forgot to go back and check, but I've corrected it now. Thank you very much :D (\(\ (^^) ((")(") crescent, black ...