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She walks through a field of serene emptiness. It is a field of secrecy, a hallowed place home to memories both sweet and fierce. The air is restless. Wild grass ...

I enjoyed this poem quite a bit. I'm not usually an enormous fan of rhyming, but it didn't feel too forced here. My only problems are the lack of punctuation ...

I agree with the other two reviewers that this poem is definitely very original and I also very much like how the number of syllables increases with each line. Though ...

It is early morning and he walks alone. The iron gates, crusted with rust, clang in his wake. Fog washes over the tombstones in waves. His feet crunch upon the ...

I must agree, the rhyme really does cripple this poem. And you do lose the rhythm by the end of the poem, which is shame. Rhyming is so overrated, I ...

Hmm, this is really too short to even give it a full review. Basically this could use some good proofreading because there are a lot of missing commas and misspellings ...

Hey there. :) Would you mind critiquing this for me? Thanks a bunch in advance.

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I can see him in the distance, a silhouette bleeding into the dull blue sky. The hushed rumble of the waves expands into my ears, louder and louder, as I ...

Nice work overall! I like the idea of the secret, and how you've used descriptive language to make that idea even more vivid. However, you have a few issues with ...

Hey there! I like the idea behind this poem is pretty good but my issues with it all stem back to the same problem: rhyming. For one thing, a few ...

EDIT: In hindsight perhaps this piece doesn't truly belong in this forum, and if it does not I apologize for the inconvenience. This is a work of prose poetry, a ...

I agree with Elinor that the repetition of "patterpitterpatter" does somewhat clash with the beauty and tenderness of the moment by interrupting the other lines. Also, the rhythm of this ...

This is a short, sweet, enjoyable poem. Nice work overall. I just have a few nitpicks... The times cried, And the times shared. I think you mean "The times we ...

I liked this poem a lot! Very nice turns of phrase and while the subject matter is obviously heavy, I think you handled it delicately. The second line of the ...