blackbird12

Another haunting piece, almost as powerful in its impact as Mirror Girl! Again, the title immediately pulls me in, and your rhythm is great. Occasionally I found myself a little ...

Would you mind reviewing this for me? Thanks a bunch in advance!

Would you mind critiquing two poems for me? I feel far more at home writing prose but I'm trying to improve my poetry writing. Any honest helpful advice is much ...

they come out to play at night. the yellow-eyed Monsters, they hide in my closet as my mind drifts to a plastic world where the deaf hear the blind see ...

I have to agree with Firestarter... Poems like this are a dime a dozen. I've said this a million times, but rhyming is soooo overrated. It's really falling out of ...

I agree that this poem is memorable because it takes an unusual opinion on the nature of stars. So very good work on the creativity there. The rhyme doesn't feel ...

Hey! Really nice work, I can't find much wrong with it at all, honestly. The title is awesome and immediately brings me to attention. I'm not a huge fan of ...

The wild, tousled hair. The full lips, downturned at the corners. The mumbling voice. You, the boy with broken stars in his eyes. So close yet so far, So high ...

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Hi there! First off: you should separate with each paragraph with a blank line. Makes it easier to read on the computer screen. :) I could feel the tears at ...

Not bad. There's just a few problems with this. Your rhyme scheme is all over the place. I think rhyming is sooo overrated in poetry--it's all about the rhythm, which ...

First of all, I have to confess, this is going to be more of a total gush-fest than a critique, because I cannot find anything wrong with this! Wonderful rhythm, ...

Could I trouble you to review this? Whenever you have the time. Thanks a bunch in advance! :D

Would you mind reviewing this? Whenever you have the time. Thanks a bunch!

Could I bother you once more for a review? You were just so darn helpful and encouraging the last time, I can't resist. :) Whenever you have the time. I've ...