blackbird12

The film version of The Color Purple is quite terrible in several aspects, but most especially in that it almost entirely eliminates the sexual relationship between Celie and Shug, reducing ...

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sargsauce is totally right about this. Firstly, NEVER use a disclaimer like that when presenting your work! It's setting yourself up for failure. Have confidence in yourself, you can do ...

Anticipation like broken glass in my mouth. An unbearable proximity: his fingers flay my skin, a blade quivers between us. Virgin eyes exposed to flaws - tobacco on his breath, ...

Hi, Hailey! The other reviewers have pointed out some more important issues with this piece, so I won't be redundant. My issues are more like quibbles... Firstly, you used the ...

Hi there! Not to sound like a broken record but I must agree with the other reviewers, this poem is in dire need of punctuation, in order to tell the ...

Hi, Sakura. The other reviewers have been very helpful and complimentary, but I have to say, I couldn't really get into this poem at all. It leaves no impact on ...

Hi, Kyllorac! It's hard to articulate how I feel about this work. It is well-written and you obviously know what you're doing, but it leaves feeling a little cold. The ...

Hi, Elinor! This piece isn't bad. You've got no problems with grammar, the punctuation is fine, the flow is smooth. My issue comes from the poem's overall lack of impact ...

Hi, Hibiscus! Love that username, by the way. I'll get right down to it. My issues with this poem stems from the annoying repetition of the lines here. It's not ...

She lurks in sugar-glazed windows, Scampers through plastic gardens and Peeks behind pink scalloped walls. In the mirror, a face that is not a face - Bruises of rouge, black-eyed ...

Hi there, would you mind reviewing this poem for me? Thanks in advance!

Hi there! Would you mind reviewing this piece for me? It's Seashell, a short romantic piece. With the help of a few others, I've been able to polish it, but ...

Would you mind reviewing this piece for me? Thanks!

He’s the boy with broken stars in his eyes, With a bloodstained smile and The laugh of a snake’s rattle. His spurs scrape the sand, A slope steepens his spine. ...