blackbird12

Could you review this for me? Thanks!

Would you mind critiquing this? Thanks.

Whoa. Well, how could I resist reading this after seeing the title?! Anyway, you get an A+ for originality. It's an awesome idea, and it was executed decently, as sargsauce ...

Woman in white sheds her lace chrysalis, bared and red, muscles straining. Shadows unfurl on walls as candles gutter out, the air raw with semen, veil mangled on the floor. ...

Me again! :smt003 Saw this thread was looking a little lonely, so... Mind doing another critique? A general fiction short story. I've edited it, polished it, so I don't think ...

This was a very nice read. Great job. Obviously you're skilled at your craft, there's nothing wrong with punctuation, grammar, or style so my critique will be very limited. When ...

This was a refreshing read for me. Love all the allusions in the first stanza, and as was said before, the flow is great when spoken aloud, very conversational. At ...

Hi, beccalicious! Some of the images here are good, but you have some major issues that need to be addressed immediately to strengthen your basic writing skills. First, punctuation. Use ...

Hi, originalhobbit! This is unusual, to be sure, and it's nice to read a poem that's a bit more ambiguous than most of the pieces on here. Red stains on ...

Hi, kingolions! I'll get right down to it. I hear the cry like a piercing howl, as it strikes deep into my heart. This is not a great way to ...

Would you mind critiquing this for me? It could use some polishing and tightening up.

revising...

Hey there! Would you mind reviewing this short story for me? Thanks!

Hey, retro! I love the story behind this poem, the rhythm and rhyme are very smooth. On to the nitpicks... Let me chase my ghosts. Don't try to hold me ...

Hey there! Since you asked two specific questions, I'll answer those both first. Capitalization is a very subjective literary device, and it really is up to the poet. I think ...