bkwrm

Go dragons! Dragons are cool!

The monsters are having a party at fifty-six grove hill lane, the monsters are having a party and it's really quite a pain! There are goblins in the basement and ...

I quite like this even though it doesn't really flow as well as it could. Love the reference to R+J -I thought of them immediately Bkwrm

Chapter One “Your turn Phoebe,” Jess said, “Truth or dare?” Phoebe beamed. “Dare of course!” she pronounced. “All right then. Can anyone think of a hard dare for Phoebe?” Jessica ...

I Love Dragons - go dragons. Monkeys are stupid annoying and they smell. Dragons are cool!! Bkwrm

It's good! You've really summed up how it feels. You might want to check it over though - what's 'shack' supposed to mean? Like it anyway - Bkwrm

Your characters need developing. They've got no depth - they're not real enough. Other than that and all the typoes, it's pretty good. Bkwrm