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Re: Arisen
Short but powerful. Well done for a well constructed poem :) But I've began again. --- Or let the evil in? again and in don't rhyme and in the UK ...
Jun 26, 2008 -
Re: Vengeance
I can't say that I agree with the feelings expressed in this poem, but it was well written and it flows well. Pieces such as this seem to be your ...
Jun 26, 2008 -
Re: The Three Queens - Chapter Three
The Three Queens *Sorry about the weird formatting - I can't seem to make it clear where my paragraphs are and where I've just separated speech from the rest of ...
Jun 25, 2008 -
Re: Way Back Home
I liked this a lot - it was very poignant, even though you kept it brief. All the words/phrases seemed well chosen and it worked well. There's nothing more to ...
Jun 25, 2008 -
Re: The Party Goes On
This is okay - but I must admit that I'm not really sure what you actually mean at the end with your reference to dead parents. Am I missing something ...
Jun 25, 2008 -
Re: Anyplace but here
This poem is good and it's also very potent. There's just one thing that confuses me a little. You switch tenses part way through a sentence;- I fall, he won. ...
Jun 1, 2008 -
Re: Garden of Hideous - Chap. 1
I like this story a lot so far and there isn't really anything wrong with it, so I'm going to be really mean and pick up on every tiny little ...
May 30, 2008 -
Re: Chapter 1, The Duty {Being Edited}
This is alright but I find one thing a little strange - why doesn't she feel some sort of affinity for the amulet when she first has it, instead of ...
May 8, 2008 -
Re: Dawning
The rhyming isn'y great, but wow! What a fantastic way you have with words. Gold star for you :D Keep writing, Bkwrm
May 1, 2008 -
Re: A Holocaust Requiem
This was okay - but I agree with Vernon that you should cut the last parts. Also I must say that your poem doesn't really make your reader feel at ...
May 1, 2008 -
Re: Smile (I Am Leaving)
I liked this - it's definitely radio material. Now I know that as it's a rap it's not supposed to be grammatically correct or anything, but there's one thing that ...
May 1, 2008 -
Re: (RUNAWAY) Chapter One: Paralyzed * title subject to change
I love part two :D I think the MSN thing is great - and their disscussion gives you a much better idea of their friendship. Plus I'm definately going with ...
Apr 25, 2008 -
Re: (RUNAWAY) Chapter One: Paralyzed * title subject to change
1. I think that Skye seems to be a fairly rebellious teenager, but I'd hazard a guess that she's also a little bit of a geek at heart - and ...
Apr 21, 2008 -
Re: Lost in Freedom
I don't get the title... maybe that's just me though. Anyway it's a great piece, but I do agree that splitting it up would work better. Also, I've always been ...
Apr 21, 2008 -
Re: Another poll for school
I love English as a subject. That said, I hate my teacher. Also, I adore French - it just sounds soo good! :D Bkwrm
Apr 21, 2008
