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to be honest, i wasnt trying to write a successful poem. like i mentioned, i wrote this when i was bored. as with all my other poems. in fact, i ...

thanks for all the comments people, im very grateful

YES! that last line is fab! so so true to some people and leaves impact. exaclty what i meant :) great work :) very interested and intigued by your work ...

thanks very much, i will make those changes. :) and thanks for taking the time to read my work :)

thanks all! hehe :) xx

thanks for all those tips, i will update and then put the edited version in this ones place. tah muchly :) bisquit

i just thought i'd let everyone know that this story is now adapted and will not be following the same idea as the eating disorder one which it used to ...

wow, you have a good poem here! the rhythm works really well and the rhyming is good too. i think at the end of the second line, u need a ...

thanks very much all :) i enjoyed writing it too!

thanks for all the hlpful comments people, i will take on board what was said Eating disorders are something that i believe need more awareness because people dont always see ...

thanks all ;) again!

this is great! well done! the rhyming and rhythm is spot on! the only thing i would query is ... 'ten thousand one times all told.' im not sure if ...

thanks noo! hehe :) xx

thanks for the comment :)

thanks lozzen :) i will make those changes! thanks for your constructive criticism. :) much appreciated :) xx