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awesomeness. this is really really good nat! i especially love the last few lines. they bring a great poem to a great end!! I would mention one or two things ...

Firslty, Hi again. i commented on some of ur other work too :) Wow, a gr8 follow on from the prologue. :) YOu have made a great start to this ...

Firstly, cool! :) This was really good and i especially loved the beginning. it inticed the reader in which is always good. I think you just need to work on ...

Pull back the curtain. It is often said that truth alone can be the healer of many dark situations; however, if the holder of that healing truth cannot see the ...

Firstly, well done. there are some really good features and ideas present in this text including the section where you use nice short sentences in the fisrt paragraph for effect ...

Firstly, i think you have created a very good story line and i think you have thought about it hard because you seem to know exactly what's going to happen! ...

Firstly, wow. this was really good. i feel like it got better as it went on because the rhythm was more consistent. i especially love the line.... 'As the minutes ...

these are really cool. i especially like the last one as you capture lots of detail in the foreground :)

Firstly, very well done. it gets straight to the point which is good. i especially love the last stanza as it sums everything up with successful rhyming too. i felt ...

i honestly dont mind what you say about it; just thought it was about time i uploaded something else. it must have been over 2 years since i wrote this ...

Firstly this is especially cool because i have never read anything like it. The rhyming is generally good and i especially like the second stanza. This is a fun poem ...

this is really good. captured the reader instantly and held many features that are really succesful. including... 'For the first time in a while I smiled today' this is a ...

WOW! i really enjoyed reading this. Firstly, its original and i have not come across anything like it before! The title immediately brought me in because i am keen on ...

This is really good! I would never try and claim to be good at art myself but i do love looking at art. I think that you have done a ...

firstly, this is really cool. The rhythm is consistent and therefore makes the poem easier to read and keep up with. i would say that you may want to think ...